整合寫作模板求指教 - 英檢

以下是我的整合寫作模板, 想請各位先進幫忙

看看是否有明顯的錯誤, 或是可以改進的地方, 非常謝謝~


The reading passage provides three points to claim that______ :列舉123. But
the speaker thinks the reasons mentioned in the article aren't completely
correct, offering several reasons to oppose the article.

First of all, While the article claims that________, the speaker indicates
that_____. He says that_________. As a result, the writer of the article
_______

Second, According to the reading passage, __________________________. (In
this case, __________). The lecturer, by contrast, suggests that

The third reason is about ________. The reading material suggests that____.
However, the lecturer refutes the idea. He mentions that______. Accordingly,
it is obvious that____.


主動請問各位一個問題,像我第二、三段的開頭, First of all,while the......., the
speaker indicates that....和 Second, According to the reading passage, the....
這樣First 和 Second後面接複合句的用法,是正確的嗎??