作文的模板?? - 留學

我最近開始在想何謂關於IELTS作文模板,
因為我以前寫的很順的方式(前言/正方/反方/結論),
有考官說他會覺得有點像是模版,
因為我正方或反方的主題句大多是...

Those people who advocate this issue often have the following reasons.
In contrast, opponents would argue that.....

所以想冒險改變一下寫作方式,不然分數也一直上不來,
經過板友的推薦開始用眾文一書,也照他的寫作方式練出自己寫作方式,

po這一篇是想問到底何謂模板?(因為沒補習,也不知道要問誰?)
還有想po一下自己寫的文章讓大家檢驗一下這樣算不算抄眾文的模板?
(其實我自己也寫的很心虛,根本就跟眾文的架構差不多,只是ideas要自己想)
如果算是模版,那有什麼地方可以改進??

請大家不要鞭的太用力! 謝謝


Topic: abortion is a kind of murder or woman's right

The past few decades have seen a dramatic debate on the controversial issue of
abortion. While some still hold to the conservative view that abortion should
be prohibited by authorities for its nature of murder, it is my personal
belief that women who have pregnancy should possess the right of abortion.
The reasons for my position are as follows.

As far as I am concerned, it is a mistaken connection between murder and
abortion. Despite of the debatable definition about the beginning of life, it
seems to me that life begins after birth/parturition. For example, how a
fetus becomes viable, that is, potentially able to live outside the mother's
womb, albeit with artificial equipments. Therefore, admittedly, aborting by
no means equals ending up one's life maliciously.

Further and even more importantly, though, the right of abortion should be
viewed as the right of privacy. As women have the liberty of being pregnant,
similarly, it should be women's decision on whether or not terminating her
pregnancy. Of course, some would argue that the medical procedure is
extremely risky in the last stage of pregnancy. Nonetheless, I would contend
that right of abortion should not be totally banned, but in order to protect
maternal lives, the authority has an interest in forbidding it.

By way of conclusion, I hold an opinion that this problem is so complex that
no divine pills can be suitable for it in the short period. However, I once
reaffirm my standpoint that the liberty of abortion ought to be allowed as
the explanations outlined above.


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再次感謝願意看完我文章的人

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