高手可以幫個忙嗎 - 英檢

由於本身英文程度不太好，也沒參加過托福，所以不清楚關於寫作
的評分標準，利用版友之前所示範過的題目，套上自己背的模板，希
望有高手可以幫我指點一下，還有這樣大概可得幾分?? 萬分感謝
這是獨立寫作
Do you agree with the statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much
their students learn.



From my point of view, I will strongly agree that teachers should be paid
according to how much their students learn rather than not. While it sounds
rational, in fact. It brings more benefits to students.
Is anything that we can do to remedy the education of the students in
Taiwan? There are a variety of ways to look at this question. First of all, I
think it is very important to improve the quality of teachers. Although the
students are not clever, a good teacher can lead them to gain knowledge. Take
Roy, Who is a teacher in my school, for instance. Roy believes that
everything is possible to a willing heart. Many sidetracked students became
better by his teaching, because he did not abandon any students.
On the other hand, our education is in trouble now. Therefore, it would
be great to pay teachers according to how much their students learn. In
addition, it provides a better and easy way to gain knowledge rather than
just reading book. I believe that teachers play an essential role in
education.
Last but not least, I prefer to agree with this statement. It is
necessary for students to learn with a good teacher. With the reasons above,
I support that teachers should be paid according to how much their students
learn. However, I think the reasons I have provided in favor of my point of
view are stronger.



這樣字數會不會太少?

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