這樣的IELTS寫作 大概能得幾分? - 留學

Hi everyone,

I just did an IELTS simulation test. I have written the below as my answers to
the writing test1 and test2 (of the second test in Cambridge IELTS 7)
I have no clue which mark I might get from the examiner if I were sitting a
real test.

If you have taken the IELTS test, could you please advise me about the mark I
might be able to achieve by the below 2 answers? I'd very much appreciate
your help!!! 萬分感謝!

Test 1
Answer:
This graph shows the consumption of meat and fish per person in a European
country from 1979 to 2004. In 1979, people in this particular country consume
more beef than lamb, chicken, or fish. Over 25 years, the consumption of red
meat, which is beef and lamb, decreases significantly, while the consumption of
white meat, chicken, increases. The consumption of fish remains almost
constant. In 2004, people consume about 250 grams of chicken per person per
week. This figure is approximately 2.5 times higher than it if of beef (approx
100 grams), 4 times higher than lamb (approx. 60 grams), and 5 times higher
than fish (approx. 50 grams). In conclusion, people of this particular country
eat a lot more chicken than the other 3 kinds of meat or fish.

Test 2
Answer:

Should punishments of each type of crime be fixed or vary according to
the overall circumstances of each crime? It is fair if the punishments are
fixed. But this is a superficial fairness. It would be a superficial fairness
if compensation of each type of jobs is same, regardless the quality, quantity,
results, effects, and other factors one has contributed from doing the same
job as the others. Punishments, like conpensation, should vary.

How should punishment vary? We need to look at why punish first.
The reason, in my humble opinion, is to prevent the criminal or whoever
commits a crime from repeating it. Two criminals may have committed
the same crime, but we might need various punishments to keep them
clear from the same or similar doing in the future.

A psychologically ill shop lifter and one who steals out of poverty
definitely need different punishments (and treatment or even help)
to stop them from stealing. A premeditated arson committed by
an upset man who did as a revenge, or by a jobless man who did it
as his hatred towards the whole world is immense. Various times
might change the verdicts as well. Spitting a chewing gum may
not even be a dismeaner and only leads to a small fine at an usual time.
However, if young people start to spit the gums everywhere because of
their admiration and imitation of a celebrity, the punishment may need to
change to stop the trend.

In short, punishment is not a matter of fairness. It serves as a management
tool which the society depends on. Punishments should vary according to
the nature of a crime to best fit the need of the society.

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