托福版的各位前輩好 小弟準備托福考試已經有一段時間 上個月報考了第一次的托福考試
結果成績非常不理想沒有達到需要的門檻 Q_Q~ 經過一陣檢討過後目前閱讀 聽力都有
在加強訓練了 唯獨寫作部分因為上次的考試我只拿到 18 分... 獨立寫作大約 380 字
舉例的部分我只有舉兩個正例 所以這次我在參考了好幾位大大的模版後 決定想要用
兩正 一反的方式來支持我的論點 但是對於反例的部分即使我把精華區都爬完了還是有
些不太確定的地方 希望各位大大們能給我一點意見或是經驗 ~
我的問題是反例的地方 我應該要舉出跟我支持觀點的負面影響 或是去進一步打擊我反對
論點的缺點呢 在此用 TPO 第六回的獨立寫作題目為例 題目是說 現代人的生活是否要比
我們祖父母那一代的生活更加方便跟舒適呢?
以下是我練習的內容：
首段：參考了一些前輩模版 但是第一段基本上大同小異 所以我就不打內容直接進入下
一段的舉例
第二段(正例)：
First of all, internet improve people's life dramatically. For example, I
ordered a new television online yesterday and received it today. I didn't
have to spend time going to the TV store. I not only save time ,but also I
have more selections online because I can check the price and discriptions
from every brand of televion. My grandparent should spend lot's of time on
trafic and cound only choise one store at the same tiime. This example
indicates that my life today is more easier than my grandparents were
children.
第三段(正例)：
In addition, lots of new devise improve people's life today and make it more
easier. for instance, I forgot to bring the keys with me last monday so I
can't open the door of my home. What I should do is just callad my family by
mobile phone and waited for one of my family to bring me the key. I don't
have to worry about nobody help me. In other hand, my grandparents didn't
have mobile phone when they were children. They might just wait several hours
until somebody go back home. It can be seen that I can save time and cope
with problem more efficient and easily.
第四段(反例)：
However, there were some problem might happen if you didn't take care. Take
my friend John as an example. He used to purchase by credit card last year
but he never remember how much he spent. As a result he always couldn't
afford the total purchase he spent and had to pay the interest to the bank.
In fact, people can avoid this problem by using debit card instead if credit
card. You also don't have to go out with cash. Purchase by debit card is
more saving.
結尾：
With the reasons above, I believe that life today is easier and more
comfortable than it was when my grandparents were children. Because there are
more advantages than disadvantages. Of course, some people maybe disagree
with my position on this issue. Nevertheless, I believe the reasons I have
provided in favor of my point of view are stronger.
在第四段 反例的舉例方面 一直很猶豫我是要舉例說 已前因為沒有甚麼設備 而非常的不
方便的例子(攻擊跟我不支持的觀點) 還是像我寫的去說明我的觀點也是有不方便的地方
這個問題困擾我好久了 最近要報名下一期的考試但是心裡一直很不安 睡覺都在想會不會
寫作又拿不到 20 根本是個惡夢 希望前輩大大們能給我一點指引 感激不盡 托福版真的
是幫助我太多太多 另外還有一個小疑惑就是我第一段開頭 跟後面每一段的開頭 是否要
先有一個空格 第一次考試我沒有加空格 會不會也因為這樣有被扣分><
再次感謝大家~ 也祝各位未來要考試的戰友們通通高分破百！
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結果成績非常不理想沒有達到需要的門檻 Q_Q~ 經過一陣檢討過後目前閱讀 聽力都有
在加強訓練了 唯獨寫作部分因為上次的考試我只拿到 18 分... 獨立寫作大約 380 字
舉例的部分我只有舉兩個正例 所以這次我在參考了好幾位大大的模版後 決定想要用
兩正 一反的方式來支持我的論點 但是對於反例的部分即使我把精華區都爬完了還是有
些不太確定的地方 希望各位大大們能給我一點意見或是經驗 ~
我的問題是反例的地方 我應該要舉出跟我支持觀點的負面影響 或是去進一步打擊我反對
論點的缺點呢 在此用 TPO 第六回的獨立寫作題目為例 題目是說 現代人的生活是否要比
我們祖父母那一代的生活更加方便跟舒適呢?
以下是我練習的內容：
首段：參考了一些前輩模版 但是第一段基本上大同小異 所以我就不打內容直接進入下
一段的舉例
第二段(正例)：
First of all, internet improve people's life dramatically. For example, I
ordered a new television online yesterday and received it today. I didn't
have to spend time going to the TV store. I not only save time ,but also I
have more selections online because I can check the price and discriptions
from every brand of televion. My grandparent should spend lot's of time on
trafic and cound only choise one store at the same tiime. This example
indicates that my life today is more easier than my grandparents were
children.
第三段(正例)：
In addition, lots of new devise improve people's life today and make it more
easier. for instance, I forgot to bring the keys with me last monday so I
can't open the door of my home. What I should do is just callad my family by
mobile phone and waited for one of my family to bring me the key. I don't
have to worry about nobody help me. In other hand, my grandparents didn't
have mobile phone when they were children. They might just wait several hours
until somebody go back home. It can be seen that I can save time and cope
with problem more efficient and easily.
第四段(反例)：
However, there were some problem might happen if you didn't take care. Take
my friend John as an example. He used to purchase by credit card last year
but he never remember how much he spent. As a result he always couldn't
afford the total purchase he spent and had to pay the interest to the bank.
In fact, people can avoid this problem by using debit card instead if credit
card. You also don't have to go out with cash. Purchase by debit card is
more saving.
結尾：
With the reasons above, I believe that life today is easier and more
comfortable than it was when my grandparents were children. Because there are
more advantages than disadvantages. Of course, some people maybe disagree
with my position on this issue. Nevertheless, I believe the reasons I have
provided in favor of my point of view are stronger.
在第四段 反例的舉例方面 一直很猶豫我是要舉例說 已前因為沒有甚麼設備 而非常的不
方便的例子(攻擊跟我不支持的觀點) 還是像我寫的去說明我的觀點也是有不方便的地方
這個問題困擾我好久了 最近要報名下一期的考試但是心裡一直很不安 睡覺都在想會不會
寫作又拿不到 20 根本是個惡夢 希望前輩大大們能給我一點指引 感激不盡 托福版真的
是幫助我太多太多 另外還有一個小疑惑就是我第一段開頭 跟後面每一段的開頭 是否要
先有一個空格 第一次考試我沒有加空格 會不會也因為這樣有被扣分><
再次感謝大家~ 也祝各位未來要考試的戰友們通通高分破百！
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