托福寫作一定要舉例嗎? - 英檢

小弟上了不算少的補習班,也在各大板爬過有關托福寫作的文章
在主體段大多建議用main+example,=而EXAMPLE不外乎時事,個人經驗,及研究報告
我想請問有沒有人用論述的方式來申論main idea然後沒有失敗(above27)的

我自己最近寫了一個題目:
A/D Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than other
teachers

其中一段我寫:
Last but not least , performance evaluation should be objective just as it is
in normal companies .Thus performance should not be evaluated by
other teachers since the evaluation would be involved in interest conflict.
It is believed that the interest conflict appears when
issues evaluated are involved in personal interest . If a boss wanted to
promote a employee , he or she would not consult other candidates about the
performance of the employee because such advises might not be objective.
Therefore, as is case in normal companies , schools should avoid such
conflict by not letting other teachers to evaluate the performance of each
other when facing the issue .

段落的主題是績效評估應該要客觀
但我沒有舉例,而是對比一個在一般公司出現的假設情況
這樣在寫托福作文中會不會很危險??

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