可否給我一點整合寫作的建議 - 英檢

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我常常覺得時間太短然後不知道重點放在哪邊

因為基本上閱讀文章會重複出現

所以提到閱讀的時候不paraphrase應該會沒有分數吧

然後加上有三個點講者常常會講很多細節的東西

不知道該不該全都寫上去還是寫個大概就好

可否幫我看看這樣寫可不可以 (材料為TPO13的整合寫作)

感覺板上都沒討論大家寫的文章 如果不能貼文的話我晚點自刪囉



The professor talks about buying and selling fossils in the lecture.
Apparently, she is not in favor of the statements in the passage because she
considers them exaggerated. She thinks it can be approached by different
angles when discussing the merits and demerits.

First, although the passage suggests that fossils bought by some private
collectors would probably not be exposed to the public and thus leads to a
decline in public interest, she debunks this idea because she thinks the real
situation is diametrically opposed to it. She says that buying fossils has
become so common that some schools and libraries routinely buy them and
exhibit them to the students and the public. This enhances the opportunity
for people to see them.

Secondly, she refutes the idea in the passage which states that scientist
might miss out on some possible discoveries. She says because each fossil
that is going to be sold should pass experts’ examination, they will
scrutinize the fossil and won’t miss any chance to find some significant
facts about the fossil.

Thirdly, while the passage hints that some evidences about fossils get
destroyed by untrained collectors, the lecturer thinks it helps more fossils
be unearthed. Because there are not enough scientists and researchers digging
out those fossils, those collectors play an important role in the discoveries
of fossils. Although some scientific information might get lost, she thinks
it is better than letting them sleep underground.

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All Comments

Carolina Franco avatarCarolina Franco2011-01-21
這樣寫還可以,我的經驗是這應該可拿G,看你寫不寫結論
Connor avatarConnor2011-01-23
但不建議First, second, 第二的用moreover之類的變化下
Xanthe avatarXanthe2011-01-26
結論若時間許可就加
Selena avatarSelena2011-01-30
謝謝^^ 的確多點變化會好一點