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Do you think teachers should be paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and

business leaders?

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大概這樣的文章 會給到fair嗎?

Among a myriad of occupations, in the current situations, the pay of teachers
is on the average of normal salary; however, their work property is diffetent
from those who have to face cunning grown-ups.
Regarded a teacher as my carrer, like me, I am qualified to say that teachers
are supposed to earn lots of money like doctors, the high-wage persons.
Examples and my personal experiences will be shed light on in the
following paragraphs.


To begin with, the most pivotal factor I hold is that no matter what level of
basic education is, ranged from primary school to high school, these
characteristics of cultivation affects students’s future contribution;
there is to say, if teachers do not care about their development of morality,
knowledge, and other spiritual acquiremnet, the underage would be under the
massive conflicts between self-satisfaction and insufficiency, according to
the eminent psychosocical crisis theory of Erikson.Relatively, for the time
being, teachers play a momentous role to educate each individual with
appropriate guidance, combined with important teaching methods and theories.
Compared with doctors, these teaching motheds from teachers are equal to the
prescriptions from doctors. Therefore, teachers have possessed as the same
highly-trained expertise as specialists in assorted fields. Needless to say,
teachers are worthy to recieve such high wage.

Even though they deserve it, the rigid filtration system has to be set up in
the meantime because it is the character of edcuation that should be given
much time to demonstrate; otherwise, over time people are apt to forget to
superintend the assigned mission. According to the Ministry of Eduacion,
the policy of the evaluation of educators is ready to help teachers prod
their teaching skills and the proficiency of guidance.
However, in a non-public-official job environment, a bad performance would
cause a laid-off sequence or other negative impacts on their business.
For instance, a mammoth flaw of surgery would give rise to close clinics down.
Thus, the government concerned should put precedence over the quality control
of teachers. Most importantly, tecahers are also responsible for making every
endeaver to prop themselves in teaching and lead students back to the track.

All in all, the whole society will bear witness to the stupendous fruitful
results because educators devote themselves to students; nevertheless,
they are at the expense of their health. In consequency, I am of the opinion
that teachers should be paid high wages.


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All Comments

Mary avatarMary2009-05-08
Ethan avatarEthan2009-05-08
不好意思,不過好想整篇文章只有一個理由,這樣好麼?
Ethan avatarEthan2009-05-12
Hedy avatarHedy2009-05-14
我打了250字也FAIR.你這篇一定有~我連單字都沒打完就被收
Olivia avatarOlivia2009-05-17
有豐富的字彙但是缺乏組織,有些句子太冗長難讀。
Edwina avatarEdwina2009-05-19
應該是Fair, 因為沒有舉例,只有幾個論點繞來繞去
Vanessa avatarVanessa2009-05-20
好吧 只好投其所好,寫點簡單的東西吧...
Frederic avatarFrederic2009-05-22
其實中間兩段 都各有舉例 只是不像八股的用example
Barb Cronin avatarBarb Cronin2009-05-22
我覺得考IBT 組織是重點
Freda avatarFreda2009-05-24
舉例不清楚是一個問題,組織要下一下功夫
David avatarDavid2009-05-28
文法結構,句意都有點怪