請教寫作 - 英檢

各位托福版友好

小弟這星期天就要上場3戰了

作文還是沒什麼突破 前兩戰 寫作部分只有17和20

把自己的模板貼上來請各位版友指教

希望能給些批評讓我改進

謝謝大家


首段：

Viewpoints differ considerably when it comes to the issue of whether "題目".
Some people believe that "題目的正面". However, I think that "題目的反面".

第二段：
My personal experiences have led me to conclude that
First of all, "支持的原因1 ". 解釋原因1
"該原因的例子".

第三段：
Second, "支持的原因2 "解釋原因2
"該原因的例子".

第四段：
People with different opinion may argue that "反對的原因 ".
It may be true that
However, they may fail to consider all possible situations, and thereby they
jumps to conclusion without substantial reasoning.
反對的原因 may cause the 壞的結果

末段：
In conclusion, given the reasons described above, when the advantages and
disadvantages of "題目的主題" are carefully compared, the most striking view
is obvious. It may be safe to arrive the conclusion that "擬支持的一面".



我自認為2～3段寫法太單調了

都是原因1＋解釋原因＋例子

至於第4段我還沒想到該怎麼解決邏輯不通順的問題

請各位不吝指教

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