請問有人可以幫忙改作文嗎? - 英檢

最近想準備IBT考試
試著練習寫作文
希望每天都可以寫一篇
可是目前寫得很不簡潔 (亂糟糟)
看範文是看得好像很順
可是自己寫起來就會東扯西扯的

不知道有沒有人願意幫我看看
願意給些意見~
謝謝!

Do you think we should protect our environment?

Environment protection has become a very popular theme these years since pollutions problems got more and more serious. Some people think that it is all right to lead the life style they are living even if it harms the environment. However, others disagree with this statement. Personally, I strongly support that we should protect our environment as much as possible because the earth had obviously warn us the changing of this planet, the resources all we left is not much, and I hope our children could
still have a suitable and lovable living environment to live.

Environment protection plays an important role in our daily life. Recently, global warming is serious enough to endanger the earth and it also warns that the earth has changed a lot. Though people are not the only specie live on this planet, we have become the main killer of this living place for making thousands of pollutions for it. In fact, human causes all kinds of danger for our living environment, such as air pollutions, trash pollutions and mental pollutions .These factors turn the planet
into a terrible place to live, and it will no sooner lead the planet to the end in the future. Therefore, we should try our best to prevent any pollution from continuing to save our environment from now on.

Luckily our ancients have so great a living place to stay, owing so much rich resources to use like full water, enormously land and other natural materials are the gift from earth, somehow people take it for granted without cherishing them. For example, people exploit gas, coal and trees endlessly without control. No sooner or later, those natural resources will keep losing and loosing. Once my friend said ”The more we take, the sooner this ends.” If we do not stop taking the natural materials
away, the earth will have no natural resources left very quickly.

Finally, I believe the earth is our great mother, who provides us a wonderful living place to live. The earth is also the best planet with beautiful scenes and abundant of food for living things to inhabit. No matter how hard it will be, we should do all we can do to protect this valuable place. So all the creatures in the world and even our children can have a better life and a better living place. Protecting environment is not only for us, but also for our children or our children’s children.

In the end, there is no denying that we only have one place to live. That is the earth. I am sure to protect our living place is our natural duty. Well goes an old saying” You can not bite the hand that feeds you.” Once we have broken the living place, we could not change it back again. The result will be too hard, and we can never possibly undertake. Whether how hard we can try, we must spare no efforts protecting our environment for listening to the warnings to the earth, stop resources from
losing ,and leaving the cleanest environment for our children and other creatures.


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