想問一個英文的問題@@"a - 英檢

※ 引述《Petrucci99 (拉拉拉)》之銘言：
: 在Writing裡的整合寫作中，有時候會忍不住想用although文章怎嚜說,但是speaker
: 認為balabala~~可是在敘述文章或speaker的想法的時候又很容易用到if,due to等
: 連接詞，這樣下來的結果就是，一個句子好長而且我不是很確定這樣對不對，可不可
: 以這樣寫等等，下面是例子
: Although the article states that if the moon is formed form earth, the
: material, like the water, on moon should be quite the same as on earth, he
: says that due to the impact, the moon should be in very high temperature,
: and the water should be evaporating in this situation.
: 一個句子裡面有althoug又有if又有due to 還有補充說明(like the water)可以幫我
: 批改一下嗎....這個問題困擾我好久了Orz

一定得寫在一句裡面嗎？ 這樣的句子對閱讀者是很吃力的 很容易樣人混淆
拆成兩句如何 用however來連接文章跟教授的論點。

The article states that if the Moon is formed from the Earth, the
material, like the water, on Moon should be quite the same as on Earth.
However, the speaker says that due to the impact, the moon should be in very
high temperature, and the water should be evaporating in this situation.

注意喔 earth是土地 土壤 the Earth, or Earth才是地球喔
月亮也是要用大寫 小寫是指衛星

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