大家獨立寫作會寫到反方論點嗎 - 英檢

大家好

我的托福即將邁入三戰

作文一直衝不高讓我很困擾和挫折

想請問我的寫法是否有什麼問題 ....

我的寫法將反方論點占了一段

曾經拿給美國的proofreader看過

他認為這種寫法會把我的論點失焦

批改人無法了解我的想法


以下是不才的模板

It has been a heated debate whether ________________.
Some people suggest that _________,
while others hold the opposite opinion and insist that_____.
As far as I am concerned,
the former makes more sense for 正方優點1 and 正方優點2

Admittedly, 反方優點 (大致情況共2句)
Nevertheless, it seems less likely to reflect the truth.
Sometime, 反could trigger unsatisfied and even terrible consequence,
leading to 反方缺點1 and 反方缺點2
In contrast, 正 has the following conspicuous merits.

正方優點1

正方優點2

Overall, the benefits of 正 are qualitatively greater than 反 in several
aspects.
Therefore, for the sake of better 目的, I hold the opinion that ---- are
supposed to ----.


這兩次的考試我都只有拿到21~22的分數,

請問我是否該使用正方例子X3這種寫法比較安全呢?

當初用這種寫法一方面是有看到類似的高分模板,

另一方面也是怕題目有點難短時間舉不出三個完全獨立的例子,

造成兩個例子其實在講同一件事的窘狀.

請高手們麻煩給我建議, 非常感謝



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