一戰寫作GG28獻醜文，當天考試文章架構分享 - 英檢

我記得當天4/9獨立給我們的題目是你支不支持政府應該要花錢支持興建museums以及

藝術表演(art performances)而不是一些休閒設施(如游泳池)之類的娛樂!

我先把我還記得的內容打下來，可能會有漏掉一些不過我盡量打，大家可以

參考一下我的架構


With the development of modern society, people are concerned about art

activities than before. Some people believe that the government should spend

money on building museums and supports art activities while other people

think oppositely.Instead, they prefer to have more exercising fields,such

as swimming pools and hope that the government could support these recreatioal

facilities. When these two opinions are compared, I totally agree with the

later position from the perspective of improving people's health, cementing

people's releationships, and helping people release their pressure.


First of all, improving people's health is the primary purpose that the

government shold help build recreational facilities. While people are

exercising, their blood's flow rate is faster than their normal condition,

thereby boosting their matabolism. As we know, when the rate of our matabolism

is increasing, certain dirty substances,such as dead cells, can be discharged

out side our bodies. Under the circumstances, people obtain a stronger body.

As a result, only by having more places to exercise can people

improve their health.

打到這邊先來說明一下，我的小段的結構大概是這樣，先打first of all,然後第一小段

的第一句直接呼應我的主題段的第一點觀點，我都是用動名詞當主詞，因為這樣子

語氣比較強，也比較立場鮮明，有的人會用it is becasue 也可以，但我的家教老師有

告誡我說it能少用就少用在獨立寫作裡面，要清楚表達人事物以及你的立場還是得指明

一個名詞或是條件，而且可以增加字數何樂而不為呢?

第二句的話就是解釋一個現象general的，一個大家都知道的真理，血流增快可以

增加人們的新陳代謝，這個好處就是可以幫助我們排掉一些髒的物質例如死掉的細胞(

雖然舉例很爛),最後的結論就是多一點地方運動我們的身體會越健康.

其實沒有很難的語法還有用字，只是架構固定，然後用了一些倒裝句還有分詞結構而已

大概方向就是 topic sentence-->general idea---->details--->advantage-->

consequence

大約都是五句話照著這個方向去寫，以下再回想一下第二段

Furthermore,building more recreational facilities can cement people's

relationships. Generally speaking, people acquaint themselves with new friends

by going to certain exercising places. Take my personal experience, for

example. I am used to going to the gym to do some weight training after my work

about four times a week.When I go there, I will find someone to become my spotter, who takes care of

your lifting weight while you cannot afford to lift it. By interacting with

my spottors and encourging each other, my relationships are not only enlarged

but also cemented.

這一段我就用平常去健身房的例子說找一些捕手,這裡用個同位格修飾還有最後用了一個

不僅...且的用法,至於發展順序還是用我上一段的方法: 呼應主題段的題目>一般的觀點

>個人經驗當做細節>好處還有結果(reflection)


第三個body paragraph我就不打了，大概也是照著一樣的方向去寫

內容是寫說透過多運動我們可以解除自身壓力，這段我寫的比較有轉折一點，

第二句寫說平常我們工作繁忙產生了一些壓力和不愉快的情緒，第三句就寫說

透過去健身房舉起重量可以發洩我的不滿的情緒又不會傷害到別人，最後我可以帶著

一個比較平靜的心情回到工作崗位上，使我的工作效率不會受到我的壞心情所影響

(夠會扯吧，寫完自己也覺得很扯)然後又用了一個不僅可以解除我的壓力，還可以

保持我好的工作效率..

結尾段就是一般結論段囉我都會用個讓步式的結尾

To sum up, although some people have their reasons to claim that the gvn shold

.....(照抄題目), from the perspective A, B ,and C(三段主旨), I believe that my

reason is the valid one.

以上大概就是我獨立寫作的架構，很多人都說要衝字數但自己實際考完這篇也只寫了

390個字的感覺，評語給我的建議是舉例可以再elaborate一點，因為我都點到為止

大概講一下通則還有好處就說所以要這麼做，不過我想可以28就夠了，在詳細下去

反而會辭窮，反而我覺得速度才是最重要的一環，我本次獨立寫完還剩下約8分鐘

因為我很熟析自己的寫作架構，所以一旦想到三個點以後手就幾乎停不下來

把我想要打的全部打完，最後剩下了蠻多的時間，就一一去檢查打錯字還有文法錯誤

檢查了一遍半，確定應該沒什麼錯誤就讓時間跑完，所以評語也沒說有spellimg錯誤

所以與其用那8分鐘再多拼100個字，我覺得不如把你的文章好好檢查個一遍

總之還是在錯誤率阿!!

從補習到考試共四個月，我的練習量算還好大概60篇獨立，10篇整合(TPO1~10)

總之就是確定自己的寫作風格然後要正確的寫作方式，不一定要模版，要真的會寫句子

才是對日後寫作提升最好的一個方式!!

大家加油囉~我轉戰GRE了!


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