SK2 Rosa-寫作滿分的關鍵祕密Part 2：發展例子 - 英檢

大家好，

我是SK2的Rosa，今天要來跟同學聊聊托福寫作。

同學常覺得寫作是四科裡面最好進步、準備起來CP值最高的一科，
但是仍然有許多同學打了四五百字，卻拿20初頭的分數。

其實在作文裡面，除了主題句之外，例子也很重要，
有好的主題句之後，讀者是看你例子的說服力決定是否要相信你。
那到底要如何寫出好的例子呢？
以下給同學三點建議，讓你的作文拿下28分。

一、相關-只談一件事
在寫例子時，最重要的一件事是要專注只談一件事，譬如：你的主題句理由
是能夠省錢，在寫任何一句話時，你都要想著“省錢”的這件事。不要又很
隨性地提起”喔對了，除了省錢，也會非常省時間喔！”

例如：
I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe not only saves
me money but also time.

把最後一句話改成

I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me
millions of NT dollars.


二、具體-寫熟悉的事物
例子除了必須要每句話都跟主題句相關之外，也要具體。所謂的具體是指要
有足夠多的細節。建議同學能夠寫日常生活中你熟悉的事物，譬如：談到”
省錢”，你可以舉你的朋友去歐洲唸書念了兩年才花了兩三百萬，但是到了
紐約唸書的朋友，兩年總共花了近一千萬。當你寫的是你很瞭解的事情時，
自然地就會有許多的細節，也會夠具體。

此外，建議同學遇到“時間”或是“金錢”時，能夠加入數字。同學常常在
一個段落裡面，會出現很多次“save money”, “save a lot”, “cost
too much”,”not affordable”，但是如此一來，讀者常常會納悶，“到
底是省了多少錢叫做省很多呢？”，假如能夠改成“only costs 8 dollars
”, “costs at least 100 dollars”，是不是更有說服力了呢？在例子裡
面加入細節或是實際數字的時候，不用擔心評分官會去查證這件事，然後如
果你寫的與事實不符，就給你比較不好的分數。托福寫作主要看的是你的說
服力，意即你有能力提出具體證據來應證你的論點。因此，證據真偽不重
要，重要的是夠具體。


三、直接-專注在改變
許多同學在寫例子時，都會很習慣鋪陳，寫了許多現況或是還沒改變之前的
事情，但是在英文的邏輯裡面，讀者會預期例子要盡量直接。這是因為對方
沒有太多時間閱讀你的作文，所以建議同學盡量寫改變的過程以及改變的結
果，現狀不用交代太多，舉個例子：

I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, I have always been poor and I often have to eat instant
noodles for months on end. Yet, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year
MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around
10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1
year, amounting to only 2 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had
studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to
tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I
might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently,
studying in Europe saves me millions of NT dollars.


同學可以直接拿掉白色的部分，變成

I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 2
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me
millions of NT dollars.


最後做個總結，

關於托福的獨立寫作，請同學記得這三個原則：相關、具體、直接

祝同學能夠越寫思緒越清楚，也能夠更喜歡用英文思考、寫作文！
新年快樂！;D

Cheers,
SK2 Rosa ^___^

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