請問這樣口說的內容會不會太少 - 英檢

※ 引述《econometric (計量天使)》之銘言：
1. I think...句型用太多；多用形容詞形容就好。
2. example的敘述太少而且不夠detail
拉長example的同時也可以把你的回答變長一些。
這樣的回答太簡潔了。
3. 建議上網找HP的書評或簡介，直接學裡面的用法最快也最好。
　 amazon應該兩個都有。
4. 文法錯有點多要小心。

: Well, Harry Potter is an interesting book I have read.

我覺得可以改一下，
Harry Potter is my favorite novel.
就ok了。
大不了前面加一句
I love to read fantasy fictions, and ... of all.

: This article is about the fantasy series.

article是指文章或論文。
可以用novel, fiction或直接用story, book比較好。
我建議用story。

受詞也怪怪的，
翻成中文是：這個文章是形容一個奇幻小說系列。
不大懂..

而且敘述有點太少。
你可以說它敘述一個正邪對抗的魔法世界。

: And there are 2 reasons why I think it interesting.
: First of all, it is full of imagination.
: For example, Harry Potter can study magic in school with his friends
: and he can use magic power to fly in the sky.

像這句就是沒有錯但念起來不大順的那種...
你可以直接形容HP用他的魔法掃把飛行..

: Also, this story is very adventureful.
: For example, that Harry Potter fights evil wizard Lord Voldermort
: is very exciting.

that要去掉；
然後主詞應該是the (magic) fight between HP and Voldermort

: That's reasons why I think Horry Potter is very interesting.

These are the reasons why...

我沒有很細的全部挑過去..
只有抓幾個錯比較明顯的而已..


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而且我沒有看過哈利跌倒..

所以幫不上什麼忙XDDD

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