詢問獨立寫作建議 - 英檢

考了兩次toefl, 獨立寫作都是Fair
全篇是以1 3 1架構撰寫

第1段和最後1段用模板
中間3段都是
Main Point
解釋Main Point
舉例,....
段落小結

但兩次考試不管對內容的熟悉度為何, 給的comments都是

You expressed ideas with reasons, examples, and details, but your response
indicated weaknesses such as

* you may not provide enough specific support and development for your
main points;
* your ideas may be difficult to follow because of how you organize your
essay or because of the language you use to connect your ideas; and/or
* grammatical mistakes or vague/incorrect uses of words may make the
writing difficult to understand.

看完評語頗為困惑
想詢問是否有大大曾經拿過這些評語
可是之後再考就進步到Good, 或知道怎麼改進這些缺點
還拜託給建議幫忙指導再戰

先萬分感激!!!

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