想問一個英文的問題@@"a - 英檢

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在Writing裡的整合寫作中,有時候會忍不住想用although文章怎嚜說,但是speaker

認為balabala~~可是在敘述文章或speaker的想法的時候又很容易用到if,due to等

連接詞,這樣下來的結果就是,一個句子好長而且我不是很確定這樣對不對,可不可

以這樣寫等等,下面是例子



Although the article states that if the moon is formed form earth, the

material, like the water, on moon should be quite the same as on earth, he

says that due to the impact, the moon should be in very high temperature,

and the water should be evaporating in this situation.



一個句子裡面有althoug又有if又有due to 還有補充說明(like the water)可以幫我

批改一下嗎....這個問題困擾我好久了Orz

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5/22要考了....好緊張阿 囧"a

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All Comments

Margaret avatarMargaret2010-05-16
逗點太多了吧...
Zenobia avatarZenobia2010-05-17
是阿....自己也覺得太多了 囧rz....
Emily avatarEmily2010-05-19
個人覺得有些地方可以用句號,比如說earth和he中間
Sarah avatarSarah2010-05-24
還有Earth感覺要大寫..最後面用現在進行式我覺得怪怪的
Jack avatarJack2010-05-28
建議原Po盡量簡單化,不要用那麼長的句子...
Rosalind avatarRosalind2010-06-01
比如說高溫就講hot就好...我覺得托福只要你文法對
Xanthe avatarXanthe2010-06-04
有講到重點,都會有不錯的分數...不用太過堅持用佳句